Jailene Saba Outline and Draft

Summary

OUTLINE:
Topic: black hairstyles
Intro: Hairstyles for natural hair are very diverse. Braids, afros, locs, and much more.

Thesis: I believe that the way others appear to the naked eye doesn’t define who you are, whether or not you are fit for the job.

Premise 1: Black Hairstyles are judged based on how they look and on how the person looks as well.

Supporting Evidence: In “ Black Hairstyles: Is Legislation Needed to Protect Discrimination,” by Ruth Terry, the author talks about how companies and places view people with black hairstyles. “When people demean hairstyles such as locs or braids as ‘dirty, ghetto or unprofessional,’ they are not, ‘actually referring to the hair,’ says Toella Pliakas… ‘What they are actually talking about is [the] people [wearing those styles].’

Premise 2: Discrimination comes in many forms and can effect ones future.

Supporting Evidence: In Race Relations: are they getting better or worse? by Peter Katel, he explains how racial discrimination affects how certain cultures are affected by society's opinion. It states, “Other survey results that Patterson cites show that blacks themselves are highly self-critical: Ninety-two percent of black men ages 18-24 saw "young black men not taking their education seriously enough" as a major problem. And 67 percent of the same group said conditions they faced were due more to what "black men have failed to do for themselves" than to what white people have done to black people.”

Premise 3/ Opposing Viewpoint: Black Hairstyles are very important to ones identity.

Supporting Evidence: In “The History of Black Hairstyles, it states, “As early as the 15th century, black communities around the world have created their own sense of style, quickly becoming a part of their identity. Spanning all the way from the ancient world, Black hairstyles will continue to weave its way through politics, social and cultural conversations.”
Hairstyles have evolved from a display of power and wealth to an expression of self and individuality

Conclusion: Black Hairstyles are apart of ones identity, so they shouldn’t get treated poorly based on looks.

DRAFT:

Dear Employers,
Hairstyles for natural hair are very diverse. Braids, afros, locs, and much more. I believe that the way others appear to the naked eye doesn’t define who you are, or whether or not you are fit for the job. Even students at school are being asked to change their hairstyle because it is not “fit” for the environment.
Black Hairstyles get judged by their appearance and how the person looks. In “ Black Hairstyles: Is Legislation Needed to Protect Discrimination,” by Ruth Terry, the author talks about how companies and places view people with black hairstyles. "When people demean hairstyles such as locs or braids as ‘dirty, ghetto or unprofessional,’ they are not, ‘actually referring to the hair,’ says Toella Pliakas… ‘What they are actually talking about is [the] people [wearing those styles].’” Even though many dress requirements and grooming regulations in institutional, educational, and workplace environments seem to be race-neutral, they all nonetheless exhibit comparable unfavorable views and unconscious biases. This is a form of racial discrimination. People hear certain things of a certain culture and base their opinions on it.
Discrimination comes in many forms and can affect one's future. In Race Relations: are they getting better or worse? by Peter Katel, he explains how racial discrimination affects how certain cultures are affected by society's opinion. It states, “Other survey results that Patterson cites show that blacks themselves are highly self-critical: Ninety-two percent of black men ages 18-24 saw "young black men not taking their education seriously enough" as a major problem. And 67 percent of the same group said conditions they faced were due more to what "black men have failed to do for themselves" than to what white people have done to black people.” For those who suffer discrimination, it has a significant negative effect on their lives. It may result in several unfavorable consequences, such as economic inequality, restricted access to high-quality housing, healthcare, and education, as well as detrimental effects on both mental and physical health.
Lastly, Black Hairstyles are very important to one's identity. It allows people to give in to their creative expression and freedom. In "The History of Black Hairstyles”, it states, "As early as the 15th century, black communities around the world have created their own sense of style, quickly becoming a part of their identity. Spanning all the way from the ancient world, Black hairstyles will continue to weave its way through politics, social and cultural conversations.” Hairstyles have evolved from a display of power and wealth to an expression of self and individuality. However, black people have historically suffered from judgment and discrimination because of their natural hair types and styles. Adopting black hairstyles can be interpreted as a way to strengthen oneself and go against these prejudices by demonstrating the beauty and validity of natural hair.
Black Hairstyles are a part of ones identity, so they shouldn't get treated poorly based on looks. Change is still possible. Many things have improved, and more people and organizations are dedicated to building a society that is more inclusive and equal. Collective effort and a shared dedication to justice and equality are necessary for change.