Gender Identity Draft Feedback has been posted as a private comment on your draft post. Please reach out if you have any questions and/or if you would like to set up a time to discuss your paper. You are also welcome to stop by my office hours on Tuesdays from 10-12 on zoom. I am available at other times if you make an appointment.
About the feedback: I primarily gave you feedback on the content of your paper and the ideas you used. I did not copy-edit your papers. That is, I didn’t give you corrections for grammar, spelling, punctuation, and I didn’t restructure your sentences. I have found that leaving those marks on papers doesn’t actually help you learn how to fix the problems. I am happy to go through your draft with you, via zoom is best because I can share my screen. We can talk through line by line if you wish.
You can also make an appointment with the BMCC Writing Center to get one-on-one help with your revision. This is an amazing resource! If I had this available to me for my own writing I would take full advantage. To make the most of your appointment with the writing center have the assignment description, my feedback, and your draft with you. Instructions for making an appointment are available here.
A few general reminders for EVERYONE about this paper:
- Your draft should include personal anecdotes. The more specific and detailed you can be in telling your stories, the more clearly the reader can see how the theories you are referencing apply.
- REFERENCE THEORIES, also called concepts, from the course. To do this you MUST define the terms and reference the reading you got the information from class. You can do this by quoting from the texts or paraphrasing. If you need help understanding the difference, this handout and this page are helpful and the writing center can help you. You should use proper MLA citations. All of the readings and sources that have been assigned have MLA citations at the end of the course schedule.
- NO OUTSIDE SOURCES. This paper is to gauge your understanding of what you are learning in the course. Some of you referenced an inspirational quote or two, and that is OK, but do not use outside sources to define and apply your terms.
- Your paper should be 750-100 words. No more, no less.
