Summary
Argument/ Research Essay, The Immigrant Experience,
The experience of immigration into the United State has created lot of storyline, every people has own personal story and has resulted an multi-cultural environment.
"Key Findings About U.S. Immigrates" by Abby Budiman, explores statistics of the American immigrant population. America is a country that stands for individualism, diversity, and freedom of expression. America's international population have immigrated from all around the world. Abby Budiman's article categorizes the statistics for where America' immigrant populations immigrated from, where the immigrant population locations are lived in the U.S, educational levels, work, and legal status. Over one million people from around the world immigrate to America every year. The American population consists of around 50 million immigrants (13.7%), with about 70% of those immigrants here legally. People from China are currently the largest population immigrating to America, and it is estimated that by 2055 Chinese people will be the largest immigrant group. America has resettled more refugees then any other country since the creation of the Federal Refuge Program in 1980. Most immigrants I've in large retro area cities, such as New York, Las Angeles, and Miami.
I think this article is good for grouped statistical value, but lacks emotion without personal experiences that hook, relate and capture the reader. I found the article boring, but it served its purpose in identifying facts and statistics for the American immigrant population. I learned that China has the most people immigrating to America, and I was surprised because the news never talks about Chinese immigration, only Mexican and South American imagination. I can relate to this article because I immigrated to America from Hungary. It was interesting to learn the statistics and numbers involved in America's overall Immigrant population adapting to the U.S.
In the article “Competition from within” by Seth Eislund, we learn about the horrible and inspiring life of an immigrant. Studying was very hard for Makka Djibrine Khatir. Now it’s like gold. Khatir was born in a difficult environment: in a refugee camp in Chad, after her family escaped from Darfur. The family lived and farmed there for another 12 years. Khatir went to school in the camp. The teachers were very cruel. They didn’t care about her personal life, even when her brother was very sick. Khatir made her own decision by escaping from class to bring her sick brother to the hospital. Later, the principal disciplined her for “disobeying” by hitting her until her back was injured. After this incident Khatir tried to quit school but her father forced her to go back to school. Finally, Khatir came to the US with her family as refugees. She started school and she started feeling comfortable there because her teachers were kind. She felt more motivated about school and became an exceptional student. Her past experience of growing up in a refugee camp became a motivation to self-discipline herself throughout high school. She always tried to do her best. These days Khatir is a university student. “Life is a competition, but it is a competition between you yesterday versus you today,” she says. She believes life can be hard but if you work hard you can have a nice life.
I spoke with my 5 classmates /Dave, EZ, Kultush , Mariana, Karolyne . I think everyone very good person and they deserve it a better live. Almost everyone say they childhood dream come to the US. Second questions only Dave think very easy make relationships if someone doesn’t speak a language. I’m sure very hard. Everybody thinks here better a life because they former country have a lot of bad issues. They are all missing family and friends in their former country. No one feels like the United States is their first home, but they love living here in the United States and planning their futures here.
The story of Franke Tokem, brings you into his experience of growing up queer in a small town in Central Africa during the 1990’s. At the age of 18, after years of hiding his true identity, he decided to leave home in search of finding a community of acceptance. His story and the connections he made takes him around the world including Ukraine, China, South Korea, America and more. On Franke Tokem’s takes the listener on a journey that explores the world and himself as he finds what he has always been searching for, frendship, love, and acceptance for himself and from others.
2 thoughts on “Argument/ Research Essay, The Immigrant Experience,”
Does the draft include an introduction? Explain.
Yes because. explained the 4 article meanings.
Is there a clear, arguable thesis statement? If so, copy it here. If not, explain.
Not clear because not see 4 article separately and missing a conclusion part.
Does each body paragraph begin with a topic sentence that supports the thesis? Explain.
Yes, show article and writer name.
Does the draft include brief summaries of the 4 required sources: Source 1: Key Findings About U.S. Immigration, PEW Research Center + Source 2: “Competition from Within,” by Seth Eislund/ The Immigrant Story + Source 3: your interview your classmates about their immigrant experience and your own experience + Source 4: select 1 article from The Immigrant Story? Explain.
Yes but the 2,3,4 th source mixing summery and respond.
Are the summaries in the author’s own words? Provide an example.
Use couple word but try use my own.
Does the draft include an analysis of the 4 sources? Explain.
only the 1st one.
Does the analysis support the thesis? Explain.
missing analysis part
Does the draft include quotes from the 4 sources? Explain.
The first and 2.nd summary
Does the draft include the author’s analysis of the quotes? Explain.
Yes 1.2.4th articles.
Does the author avoid plagiarism?
if use “”” sign I think this not plagiarism
What are the strengths of this draft? Explain.
i think need add more resources and more details
What suggestions do you have for improving this draft? Explain.
I need make real format. Add analysis, conclusion, use more quotes, make longer
1.Does the draft include an introduction? Explain.
I found the introduction to Tunde’s essay. She introduces her thesis statement in one sentence, and she also introduces the diversity of immigrant cultures, but I think she is missing a hook, which would help the reader connect to the next paragraph better.
2.Is there a clear, arguable thesis statement? If so, copy it here. If not, explain.
“The experience of immigration into the United State has created lot of storyline, every people has own personal story.” I think this sentence is her thesis statement, but it is very short.
3.Does each body paragraph begin with a topic sentence that supports the thesis? Explain.
Yes, at the beginning of each paragraph Tunde introduces each of her paragraphs using a quote from the author of the article. I like it.
4.Does the draft include brief summaries of the 4 required sources: Source 1: Key Findings About U.S. Immigration, PEW Research Center + Source 2: “Competition from Within,” by Seth Eislund/ The Immigrant Story + Source 3: your interview your classmates about their immigrant experience and your own experience + Source 4: select 1 article from The Immigrant Story? Explain.
Yes, she uses all sources. it is very clear. Because she completes a paragraph with one sources, each one appears in each separate paragraph.
5.Are the summaries in the author’s own words? Provide an example.
I believe Tunde completed the summary in her own words, and even though there is a lot of data analysis in these two articles, which is difficult to relay, she did a great job.
6.Does the draft include an analysis of the 4 sources? Explain.
For the most part, except for the last source, “The story of Franke Tokem,” she summarizes his story, but there is no analysis.
7.Does the analysis support the thesis? Explain.
Yes, in her summary I think the points she makes and her analysis of the essay support her thesis.
8.Does the draft include quotes from the 4 sources? Explain.
I did not find her quotes from “Key Findings About U.S. Immigration” in the sencond paragraph of Tunde’s article, but she does quote Competition from Within. ” by Seth Eislund.
9.Does the draft include the author’s analysis of the quotes? Explain.
Yes, she analysis of the quote from “Competition from Within.”
10 Does the author avoid plagiarism?
She did not plagiarize in the article.
11.What are the strengths of this draft? Explain.
She is very well organized and this article is very clear.
12. What suggestions do you have for improving this draft? Explain.
More information is presented at the beginning.