Summary
In my opinion, genetics and environment can define who we are. Why am I of this opinion? Simply because during our growth since we were little, we lived with our parents and it is normal to copy what they do. As a result, the child who grows up to become an adult is the majority of his parents’ pasted copy. On the side of the environment, where we tend to frequent or whom we frequent, can contaminate our personality.
On the other hand, our genetics or environment each plays different and essential roles. For example, I met a person who has a different religion than mine and who later became my friend. One day, while we walked near a bar, she asked me if in my religion it was allowed to drink alcohol. i told her that no, we were not allowed to drink it. As a reply, she told me to taste it despite the ban and that I would love it. Something that I categorically refused. All this is to say that if I had received another education besides the one from my parents or refused to become like them, I would fall into the trap that my environment has set for me.
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Publish your draft here as a post, under the category Peer Review 1.
Next, comment on 2 classmates’ drafts by answering the 10 peer review questions below:
1. Does the draft include an introduction? Explain. I think this draft has an introduction but I will erased the begining ( In my opinion) because it can be place in another part of the essay.
2. Does the draft include a summary?
No this draft does not include a summary.
3. Does the summary include key ideas from the text? Explain. the draft took in consideration one part the main idea of the text that is the influence that our enviroment can have on us.
4. Is the summary stated in the author’s own words? Explain.
yes I think that the author of this draft use their on words and perspective of the topic even used her own past experience.
5. Does the draft include an analysis of the text? Explain.
I don’t think that the author did an analysis of the text;however, the author tried to show a perspective of the text.
6.Does the draft include quotes from the text? Explain.
I can’t recognize anything that could be seen as a quotetion from the text.
7.Does the draft include the author’s analysis of the quotes? Explain.
No there are no quotes.
8.Does the author avoid plagiarism by attributing relevant ideas to the article? Explain.
Not the author did not mention anything about the text.
9.What are the strengths of this draft? Explain.
Good organization of the parragraphs, give past expiriences
10.What suggestions do you have for improving this draft? Explain.
I will suggest to the author that mentioned the text and the author of this because is important for the undestanding of the reader to know about what writer is summarizing or talking.