Chelsy Rodriguez
Professor Ewa Barnes
Critical Thinking 100
04/4/2022
Women’s empowerment today has transformed in many years. Women empowerment indicates how they establish many circumstances that show their independence on women’s rights. In the past, society have labeled women to be weak minded and unintelligent. They were denied many things such as not being able to vote or to even voice their own opinion. Women empowerment then changed everyone’s perspective today because of activists, influencers and even writers who are all women that voices their own opinion about our rights.
In the 20th century, women were not able to voice their own outlook of their own living situations. They were known to stand behind a male figure as it “presents” themselves and not being able to be known as an independent. Therefore, if there are any circumstances and the husband is opinionating about them then the wife must follow and obey the husband’s rules. These issues then developed making women to become powerful on how society thinks about us, having to put an end to society controlling women willpower. During the women suffrage movement it took years to allow women to vote which had made many activists incandescent about how long this movement was taking. According to the article on www.history.com it says “By then, the suffragists’ approach had changed. Instead of arguing that women deserved the same rights and responsibilities as men because women and men were “created equal,” the new generation of activists argued that women deserved the vote because they were different from men.” This article explains that there was a focus on women being able to vote because we are known for being strong individuals and have strong minds.
In-conclusion, this essay has shown that society controls the power of women. Women empowerment had transformed in so many years being able to vote, voice our opinion and being able to have freedom. Women were not free and not independent because they must be behind their male figures in their life. In the articles it explains the Women’s suffrage movement which was successful in helping women to vote and have full citizenship today.
Citations:
https://www.history.com/topics/womens-history/the-fight-for-womens-suffrage
3 thoughts on “Transformation in women’s empowerment”
Hi, Chelsy!
Great start! This is an interesting subject to tackle, and I think you’ll absolutely nail it with a bit more focus. Your thesis statement wasn’t too clear, but I believe you’re aiming to address how women have changed their narrative over the last few decades. Pardon me if I’m overstepping, but I have a few ideas that might help you get to where you’re going.
I think your thesis statement should be something like, “Women have made strides in advancing their position in a patriarchal society and will maintain that moment if they follow the fundamentals developed during the Women’s Suffrage Movement.” Something to that effect. Then, you can argue why all of the principles practiced in the past will work wonders in modern day, and how it can propel the women’s movement in the future. You can also add obstacles the patriarchy has instilled and how the same fundamentals helped women overcome them.
Citing History.com is perfectly fine, but you want to scrape up every point you can, so I’d grab a three or more sources on “women’s rights movement” from CQ Researcher. Articles that argue both sides of your paper, (why you’re right and why someone might think you’re wrong), will ultimately make your paper stronger.
If you’re ever worried about citing correctly, you can always use:
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/resources.html
They’ll easily prepare and organize your citations for you. No sweat.
OR…. If you want your paper to be about the transformation in women’s empowerment, the women’s suffrage movement is a great starting point, but you’d also need to illustrate what they went through and how the terrain changed as decades passed, and how women adjusted and advanced in the face of those changes. I would love to see an example of women’s rights being dictated to and/or stripped from them. Also, who was the face of the movement, and how’d it gain traction? Some high points, low points, and pivotal moments, allies who came aboard to help will also reinforce your point. Illustrating how strong-minded women are would be extremely effective here.
All in all, I think it’s a great start. A bit more focus and fine tuning and you’ll be good to go! Don’t forget to check the Peer Review page to see what the requirements are. I hope this was helpful. Can’t wait to read your next draft!
All the best.
Thank you so much !
No problem!