Summary
Topic: lack of jobs in America
Intro: Today, many young people don't have jobs. They end up with a lot of free time and can easily get caught up in the dangers of the streets. Things like bad influences from friends, drugs, and violence can all be part of that. It's tough to stay in control when you're in that kind of situation. On the other hand, is there enough work for them for them to become employed? In this essay, we will look at how young people without jobs face risks on the streets and why we need to help them stay safe.
Premise 1:
Many young people can't find jobs because there aren't enough available or they lack the needed skills.
Supporting Evidence:
- For example, in regions where the manufacturing industry has declined, many young people may struggle to find employment due to the lack of opportunities in this sector.
- For example, in technology, employers may look for specific skills in programming or data analysis, but many recent graduates may not have acquired these skills during their education.
Premise 2:
When young people don't have jobs, they might end up doing risky things or hanging out with the wrong crowd.
Supporting Evidence:
- Article of Alan Greenblatt named crime in America from the CQ researcher: “ One 1997 study found that Black men faced a 1 in 4 chance of going to prison at some point in their lives, compared with less than 1 in 6 among Hispanics and 1 in 23 among white men. “For certain men — Black men without a high school degree — imprisonment is modal in statistical terms,” wrote Tracey Meares, a Yale University law professor. “In everyday language, it is normal.”
Without a job or something to do, young people might spend time with friends who do dangerous things like drugs or crime.
Premise 3 / Opposing Viewpoint:
Some people might think that not having a job when you're young isn't a big deal and that things will work out eventually.
Supporting Evidence:
For example, it can make it difficult for young people to gain the skills and experience needed to succeed in their careers
Conclusion:
In conclusion, the problem of young people not having jobs and the dangers that come with it is really important. It affects many young people and can make things harder for our communities. By understanding these challenges and finding ways to help young people find work, we can build a better future for everyone.
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1)Yes, the draft includes both a clear thesis statement and a conclusion
2) Each body paragraph begins with a premise or topic sentence that supports the thesis, and each is a different side(perspective)
3)Each body paragraph includes relevant supporting evidence Examples like the decline in job opportunities in certain sectors and the risks young people face when unemployed. the articles in CQ Researcher are used to support the argument about the consequences of unemployment.
4)yes this draft included three sources not all of the sources are specified one of them is referenced as Alan Greenblatt’s article from CQ Researcher.
5)The research supports the author’s thesis by providing evidence, such as explaining how unemployment can lead to involvement in crime or risky behaviors making the argument stronger and backing it up with reliable sources
6)An opposing viewpoint is indeed presented, suggesting that not having a job as a young person may not be a significant issue.then this point is refuted by highlighting the challenges young people face in gaining skills and experience without employment.
7)The audience would be those concerned about the well-being of young people and maybe employers or people wanting to implement change. The draft addresses the importance of helping young people find employment in hopes to eliminate all sorts of risks
8)There’s no outline provided
9)The strengths of this draft is that it has a clear thesis statement the premises are also well-supported and have relevant evidence, and u didn’t forget to include an opposing viewpoint followed by a rebuttal.
10)Overall the draft effectively highlighted the problem of youth unemployment and its risk what it could improve would be from exploring potential solutions and sources to back up those arguments. an outline could help improve the overall organization of the essay.