Topic: can the U.S reduce the number of people falsely imprisoned.
Thesis: A great percentage of people who are convicted of crimes they didn’t commit are not exonerated,
Conclusion: The National Registry of Exonerations and the New York-based Innocence Project, which cares only to give exonerations to those who has DNA evidence, are the major reason why many wrongly imprisoners are still in prison
Premise:.1 Not much is known about how common wrongful convictions are for misdemeanor crimes, such as assault and battery, drug possession, theft, and traffic offenses. They make up the great majority of criminal convictions, but they account for only four percent of exonerations counted in the registry. The registry offers an explanation for this: “Exonerations are expensive, time-consuming affairs. {Mantel,p 2} However, This should not be an excuse for lack of attention to innocent people seating behind bars. The little resources they have are generally reserved for felonies committed by people of color that are sentenced to many years in prison
Premise: Many people of color are in prison due to false eyewitnesses, police brutality that leads to false confessions, and unreliable or tampered fingerprints. For example, Strickland had been sentenced to life in prison in 1979, at age 19, after being convicted of participating in the murder of three young adults. There was no physical evidence tied him to the crime, he was convicted because of an eyewitness that later try to change her statement. He lost 43years of his life in prison.
Premise: Many theories has shown that human memory is malleable and can be easily influenced. Depending on the questions asked, the statements that are made, and the procedures the police use can actually create a false memory, Police should follow best practices; police should stop racism. Stop lining up photos for identifications and having an officer who is unaware of the suspect’s identity conduct the procedure Or research. “Police officers who know who the suspect is can steer the witness, even inadvertently, toward the suspect, and that can lead to a misidentification,’”{ mantel, p6}
Counterargument Rebuttal DNA and fingerprint should be done two to three times in setting to confirm the result. Others may argue that the lab workers are expert and truthful, but no man is perfect, Police are brutal to young adults, especially to people of color is overrated. Young kids are forced with torture to confess to crimes that they did not commit. exoneration should be less expensive and chances are to be given to anyone claiming to be innocent.
Final Project Plan: In my final project, I will research more articles that are related to my topic. And try to build a strong conclusion.
3 thoughts on “Adama Bah peer review”
Adama–good work. Thesis and conclusion mean the same here. Yes, try to tighten your conclusion, to make it more arguable and direct. How will you present this?
According to the peer review questions, this draft has a conclusion/thesis , along with three premises that includes the supporting evidence. The premises make sense and are good points.
The evidence is very detailed and direct. The evidence also connects back to the conclusion/thesis. This draft is well organized, it is also well-written and appropriate for a college level paper. The grammar and vocabulary is really good and on college level as well.
The strengths of this draft is the evidence.