Topic: Teen Suicide
Thesis: Why should teens be screened for suicidal thoughts? Will it be effective?
Conclusion: The percentage of teen suicide is very high, and it is still increasing. I believe that this type of screening is very much needed, and it is necessary in our society.
Premises: Physicians should scan children for suicide. It can all start because of family situation, bullying, mental illness. These problems can get caught by the doctor. And with medication and professional help maybe there is a chance, that teens could be saved from suicide.
Premises: Not only doctors should screen teens for suicide but also teachers should be properly trained. It will include how to look for signs of depressions, anxiety, suicidal thoughts, how to talk about it and how to help their students.
Premises: If there is a chance, that we can help these teens who have suicidal thoughts. Why should we not screen them and try to safe their life?
Counterargument: Suicidal screenings are hard and can do worse than good. We don’t even know how effective it is and if it would help?
My plan for the final product: Creating argument project, that will be supported with article facts and my own experience. Which hopefully will state clear that, we very much need suicidal screening especially for teens. Especially nowadays they need more support than ever. And hopefully these screenings both at school and at checkups will safe many lifes.
3 thoughts on “Aneta Matyga Peer Review: Teen Suicide”
1. Yes she included both the thesis and the conclusion.
Thesis: Why should teens be screened for suicidal thoughts? Will it be effective?
Conclusion: The percentage of teen suicide is very high, and it is still increasing. I believe that this type of screening is very much needed, and it is necessary in our society.
2. Yes as all three premises mentioned about screening youths for possible suicidal behaviors.
3. Yes. Aneta talked about teachers and doctors getting involved with screening teens for unusual behaviors. In her conclusion, she said “I believe that this type of screening is very much needed, and it is necessary in our society”.
4. No she didn’t mention any sources from CQ Researcher or anywhere else.
5. Yes as she explained ways to detect suicidal behaviors or symptoms and why screening youths would be useful.
6. Yes she did. Her counter argument stated that “Suicidal screenings are hard and can do worse than good. We don’t even know how effective it is and if it would help?”.
7. Her draft is easy to read and understandable. She clearly separated the thesis, conclusion, premises , and counter argument on different lines.
8. Her grammar is great and appropriate for a college paper.
9. Her strengths are in the premises and the counter argument.
10. I would say to make sure to include sources from CQ Researcher.
1. Yes, the draft has a thesis statement and it is arguable. The thesis statement is “Why should teens be screened for suicidal thoughts? Will it be effective?” The conclusion is “The percentage of teen suicide is very high, and it is still increasing. I believe that this type of screening is very much needed, and it is necessary for our society.”
2. Yes, the draft does have 3 premises that develop and support the conclusion in doing suicidal screenings.
3. Yes. all the evidence is directly connected to the conclusion because it shows that doctors and teachers should be doing the screenings.
4. The draft does have 3 sources but we do not know If they are from CQ Researcher. They have not specified where they got their information from.
5. Yes the research supports the conclusion because the evidence and premises are strong enough and correlate well with the conclusion.
6. Yes, the author does include an opposing viewpoint with a rebuttal. It is “Suicidal screenings are hard and can do worse than good.” The rebuttal is “These problems can get caught by the doctor. And with medication and professional help maybe there is a chance, that teens could be saved from suicide. ”
7. Yes, the draft is well organized and easy to understand.
8. Yes, the vocabulary is consistent for a college-level paper.
9. The strength of this draft is that the evidence and the premises are well written and explained.
10. Yes, one suggestion is to list the sources and where you got the information from.
Aneta–sounds good. The terms conclusion and thesis are synonyms in the crt context, and as such, neither one can be a question. The same is true for a premise (#3). And how will you present this project?