Daily Archives: March 4, 2025

Essay #1 made me realize there’s much more to add to your statements. I learned that I went off topic a couple of times and did not provide exactly why the quotations I used were of importance, I did not fully flesh out my ideas on why the student could have done better, I did not include if they included primary sources, and added words and ideas of something that the radar article did not talk about.  I also forgot to talk about the formatting of the student sample essay In the future, I would ensure to include better punctuation. I would also fix my works cited as I saw I did it incorrectly. I saw that I also could have added more explanation to my sentences and tried to include filler sentences that didn’t lead to much in my essay. My format wasn’t as correct as it should have been, Next Essay I would take everything I got wrong in my feedback and be able to make a more fluent and detailed essay.