Week 4 Discussion

  In the compelling short story “Araby” by James Joyce, the author encourages readers to examine the intricate character of the nameless narrator and the complexity of the human condition.   What’s ineffective about this sentence is that the writer is being general rather than being specific to what they are trying to say. The writer also seems to be complimenting the story which is something we shouldn’t do. I would rewrite it in a way for the sentence to be more specific. In the story “Araby”, James Joyce wants the readers to see the amount of complex the character of the nameless narrator is and puts the readers inside of the characters mind to truly see the characters thoughts and feelings. It gives us more detail about what’s going on with the character, this gives the story and the character meaning as it helps us expand the story’s idea its trying to give the reader.            

The assertion needs explicitness, neglecting to give proof to help the creator’s goal of clarifying the complexities of the human condition. It needs clearness with respect to the intricacy of the actual condition and depends excessively intensely on the writer’s point of view, which ought to be induced by perusers as opposed to expressly expressed. Also, it ignores the elements adding to the intricacy of the condition. To improve the adequacy, the updated adaptation ought to dive into the points of interest of the condition, its effect on character advancement, topical components, phonetic procedures utilized, the hero’s battle with adoration initiated visual deficiency, and the significance of character names as huge subtleties.

In the compelling short story “Araby” by James Joyce, the author encourages readers to examine the intricate character of the nameless narrator and the complexity of the human condition. Instead of complimenting or critiquing the author’s book because we already know it’s a good book, I would skip that part and go straight into the book’s name or the author’s name. Next I will explain more … like how does the author encourage us the reader to examine the character ? or why do we even need to examine the character ?How does examining the character help us figure out or connect with the complexity of the human condition?     With the revising it should maybe look something like this…        In the short story “Araby” by James Joyce the author introduces the nameless narrator and the main character of the book is a very complicated and detailed thinking person. Throughout the story the author encourages the readers to examine the character and the overall complexity of the human condition by using the characters inner dialogue in an attempt to understand the charterers thoughts, and feelings throughout the story

Read the following sentence from a student essay. In the compelling short story “Araby” by James Joyce, the author encourages readers to examine the intricate character of the nameless narrator and the complexity of the human condition. What is ineffective about this sentence? In my opinion, this sentence is ineffective because it is too general and the writer only mentions what you can learn from the story but not what it’s about to get you to that point where you learn something from it. How might you rewrite it in a way that offers specific details that would be informative to a reader? If I could rewrite it I would do it in a way where I mention what happens to support why I feel that way. For example In the short story “Araby” by James Joyce, the author encourages readers to follow the journey of a young boy who gets infatuated with a girl and what can come from it.

In the student essay about “Araby” by James Joyce, the student should specify the human condition that is being discussed. Also, the sentence is vague and doesn’t go into details, backing what the student is trying to comply. The student also doesn’t explain how the author encourages readers to examine the details that is being mentioned. If I was to rewrite in a way that offers specific details, I would include how the author encourages readers. I would also include the human conditions to give the readers an insight of the story more. I would explain how the narrator’s character is intricate, that would give more background information about the narrator to better help explain to someone who hasn’t read the story. Overall, the student’s sentence needed a few specific details to get the perfect sentence.

The sentence could be more effective with specific details about the narrator and how the story explores the human condition. A rewrite might be “In Araby, Joyce delves into the psyche of a young boy, revealing the disillusionment of youth through vivid imagery and a poignant quest for meaning.” The original sentence is a bit vague because it doesn’t provide concrete examples of how Joyce explores the narrator’s character or the human condition.

The sentences effectiveness lies in its ability to capture the essence of “Araby” precisely showing not only the intricacies of human emotions but also how James Joyce portrays this theme through the narrators experiences. By focusing on the narrators infatuation and subsequent disappointment the sentence directly highlights the psychological voyage at the heart of the tale. This journey, characterized by the disparity, between aspirations and harsh realities faced by the narrator serves as a representation of humanity grappling with lifes imperfections on a scale. Joyces storytelling technique, delving into the world of the narrator becomes a means to delve into themes like longing shattered illusions and loss of innocence. This narrative approach enables readers to recognize how personal encounters mirror truths enhancing their grasp of aspects within the story and mankind’s complex existence. The thorough rephrasing not clarifies themes within the narrative but also encourages readers to delve deeper into character development and engage with its relevance concerning personal growth and humanity’s quest, for self discovery.

In the compelling short story “Araby” by James Joyce, the author encourages readers to examine the intricate character of the nameless narrator and the complexity of the human condition. Please answer the following 2 questions: What is ineffective about this sentence? How might you rewrite it in a way that offers specific details that would be informative to a reader? In all honesty, the line does not offer any information regarding the manner in which the author demonstrates the complexity of the nameless individuals or the way in which it makes it difficult. I have a feeling that if I were to write this in a different way, I would preserve everything that is in this line, but I would add a transition word that would lead into me talking about cases where the author displays the complexity of the nameless character. After that, I would either supply direct quotes or paraphrase the cases, and then I would follow up with an analysis that is connected back to the claim that I made initially. In the compelling short story “Araby” by James Joyce, the author encourages readers to examine the intricate character of the nameless narrator and the complexity of the human condition by showing the character in a constant battle between desire and reality vs fantasies. This can be see when….  

Hello professor. First, I would like to say what is ineffective about this sentence is that it does not go into enough detail. We have no idea what the writer of the sentence is talking about other than theirs a nameless narrator and we are to analyze their character in a condition we know nothing of. The statement is way too broad. In order for your readers to understand the perspective in which he or she wants to direct the readers, especially in your thesis statement, it is very import to express and briefly describe the relevant dynamics of the story. If this sentence had to be re-written by myself. First I would analyze the original statement that was made and get more into detail by breaking each part down into individual parts. For example, In the beginning of the sentence the writer starts off by telling us about the author’s intentions that he has for his readers of his book “Araby”.  After introducing the author I would have gone into some greater detail of where he was born and his age as I would with he rest of the sentence. There was a lot of information that could have been included here.

The sentence is ineffective because it is a generalized statement. The sentence does not offer any details to support its claim about the author trying to get her readers to understand the complexity of the human condition. It offers no details about what the condition is either. The sentence is also ineffective because it is trying to tell us the authors point of view which is not the readers job. Also the sentence did not explain what made the “condition” complexed? If I were to rewrite the question I would include details about what the condition is and how that effects the characters development and his development. I also will include details about the different themes and languages used in the story. I also will included information about why the boy was blinded by love and his struggles with reality. I also would include the characters names, since that is important details also.

This sentence is ineffective because its too general and the readers get no information about what they are reading. It tells the reader that it is a compelling story but what does that actually mean, you can say something is compelling but is it actually? The sentence is so general that I personally would have no interest of reading because it has nothing to hook the reader in, it is only just an opinion of the story and nothing more. The way I would rewrite this sentence is In the story araby a young man goes through life and has an epiphany that changes the way he feels about others. This sentence provides some context about the story without giving away too much or leaving too little. This sentence encourages the reader to find out about this young man and the epiphany that he had in the story.

The sentence is too general, leaving out the actual context details, making it ineffective to communicate the author message. The description of the given sentence is ineffective lacking the real opinion of the student giving a profoundless sentence, because of the overwhelming generalization of the sentence. I will try to provide more details from the story, mentioning the characteristics of the author’s message, would offer more informative insight into the character’s development and the main themes of the human condition shown in the narrative, sharing  the story main points , key scenes and moments to really communicate my ideal opinion of the story.

What is ineffective about this sentence? What I think is ineffective about this sentence is, sentence doesn’t really show what the story is about.  It’s too general and could be about any story.  The sentence lacks the clarity and detail needed to capture the essence of the story.  It fails to introduce the main characters by name or provide any description of their complexities, leaving the readers questioning who the intricate character is and what aspects of the human condition are being explored.  Additionally, the use of the word “compelling” is subjective and unnecessary. This word is just someone’s opinion and shouldn’t be used at the beginning of a sentence. How might you rewrite this sentence it in a way that offers specific details to improve the clarity and detail would rewrite the sentence to include character names, describe their complexities, specify the aspects of the human condition being examined, and avoid subjective terms like “compelling”.

For one, praising Joyce’s ability to captivate readers isn’t needed. For another, the particular intricacies of the narrator’s character and where the complexity of “Araby” lies can be detailed without a leading sentence like the above one. I get the impression of trying to couch oneself in what this writer presumes to be widely-held opinions when they’re faced with their lack of a decently-stringed thesis. Offering specific information easily cuts fat like that sentence. After all, a lack of confidence is remedied by finding something, anything, that’s enveloped within itself enough to fit in one sentence. Then one can do that again, a second time, a third, and ideally pierce a common thread through them all. e.g. If I find and pull together many co-occurrences relating to “blindness” peppered through the text everywhere from actions to settings, I might allude to that in what seems to be the first sentence of an essay. James Joyce’s short story “Araby” follows a nameless young boy who, blinded by the light of a “love” that he can’t place in reality, stumbles into the darker corners of his world.” If not super rooted in facts for an introductory sentence, I think that the concrete details therein can evoke the question “What does that mean?” in a way that trusts in the following paragraphs will hold (subjective) answers.

This sentence lacks any personality of the story being talked about in this essay. It is a very general sentence and could be about any story. It also has the word compelling, which I think is an unnecessary addition to the sentence. The sentence doesn’t give the characters’ names or any description of the complexity of the human condition in this story. The sentence also doesn’t give an example or explanation of what the reader is examining about this no named character. Reading this sentence my questions would be; Who is this intricate character? What are we examining? What about the complexity of the human condition? What condition is this? If I were to rewrite this sentence, I would give details to the characters and provide their name. I would describe the human condition and why that is important. I would also take out compelling from the first part because I think that’s an opinion and that should be left up to the reader. In addition, When referring to the author I would use their last name.

The sentence from the student’s essay “In the compelling short story “Araby” by James Joyce, the author encourages readers to examine the intricate character of the nameless narrator and the complexity of the human condition” shows a few ineffective elements. The first one is the student used “compelling short story” now I believe we all know Professor Conway will only pick compelling stories, which means the beginning sentence is starting off weak. The second issue the student basically listed off what the body of the essay is going to be instead of putting in some creative thinking where the body of the essay would explain that creativity. I would rewrite the sentence like this; In “Araby” by James Joyce, the author tells a story about a young boy who falls deeply in love, but he is so in love that it leads to him being distracted from his own life leading to disappointments.

The sentence that the student gave was ineffective. This is because all the student did was just state what the author did, with no explanation whatsoever. as to what the author was trying to do. If someone including myself, were to read it, they would have no idea as to what the student was trying to express. If I were to Rewrite this students sentence, I would include how the nameless narrator has a crush on his friends sister, and the way he momentarily see’s life differently when simply either thinking of her or being around her. He completely begins to become lonelier and lonelier, distancing himself from even his friends all due to the fact of how much he imagines of the girl he is “in love with”. The sentence could also have the development of the character from the beginning of the story to the end, something as simple as mentioning how he believed he was in love with his friends sister, not realizing that he was just intrigued due to him wanting something more and different.

I Think the student sentence is very unclear and general, and somewhat lacks specific details because the sentence is not explaining what the author actually wants to say or how the human condition is actually complex in the story.If I had to rewrite this sentence I would write about that how did views of unnamed character changes on love and reality.After first romanticizing Mangan’s sister, his disenchantment reveals more aspects of his personality. As they accompany the protagonist on her trip, readers are forced to confront the complexities of the human condition, including the depth of desire, the bitterness of disappointment, and the process of self-discovery. Through painful moments, such as the protagonist’s revelation at the bazaar, Joyce promotes investigation into the complex facets of human emotions and goals woven within the story of “Araby.”So, i would have written these details so that the reader would know what is actually happening in the story and would get clear view of that.

I think the sentences from the student is too general, it didn’t show any specific detail to provide what did author really trying to say. The sentence is ineffective because the student should give some details to let the reader get related to the story, but the student only post out his own opinion without any details. If I am going to rewrite the sentences, I will try to provide more details from the story, like how did the main character felt heartbreak after he went to the market and how did he realize the relationship between him and the girl. to provide these details will help reader get into the story and not to confused about why did character grown up in one night.

This sentence from a students essay is ineffective because it is too vague and not specific enough. The sentence is ineffective because it is not explaining what the author is trying to say or his message. It’s simply a general statement that doesn’t give the reader much understanding of what’s going to be talked about. This statement also makes for a bad and ineffective thesis statement. Just stating the author wants us to examine the character of the narrator and intricacy of human condition. With no context or background to support leaves the reader and myself confused. It needs to be more specific so the reader can be able to understand the point of view of the writer. To improve it someone could say, “In James Joyces ‘Araby’, Joyce wants readers to understand the protagonist actions/emotions while dawning on a disillusionment with adolescence while also having a crush on Mangan’s sister.

The sentence is ineffective because its not specific and doesn’t provide any concrete examples or evidence to support the claim about the story’s themes. To improve it, someone could rephrase it to include specific details about the narrator’s experiences and the themes explored in the story. For instance, someone could say, “In James Joyce’s ‘Araby,’ readers are prompted to dive into the complexities of the protagonist’s psyche as he navigates his infatuation with Mangan’s sister and his disillusionment with the reality of adulthood.” Also, mentioning key scenes or moments from the story, such as the narrator’s reflections on his feelings for Mangan’s sister or his disappointment at the bazaar, would offer more informative insight into the character’s development and the main  themes of the human condition shown in the narrative.

This sentence in this student’s essay is a bit bland. When stating a thesis in an essay, one must share a small summary behind the story that they are writing their essay on for readers to have a much clearer understanding of what to expect when reading the essay. After the summary of the story is presented, then a valid thesis statement, breaking down how the reader views the author’s ways of presenting things can present the reader with a clear note of what to expect when reading the prompt. By what’s presented here in this thesis, readers would be a bit confused as to what this writer is referring to, as there isn’t any context behind it. If I were to rewrite this thesis, I would state my thesis as “In the story of Araby, Joyce presents how the events of an individual’s life, can create such mythical conceptions in the human mind”.

The sentence from the student’s essay is too vague, by just stating that the story examines the narrator and the complexity of human condition doesn’t give insight as to how that is being done. For starters we know the narrator is anonymous and they don’t tell us how the narrators acts or even displays any signs of his complex actions. I would instead say The story “Araby” illustrates how a crush or longing for someone creates a sense of obsession. In the story the narrator shows cases of obsession and stalking. “I ran to the hall, seized my books and followed her. I kept her brown figure always in my eye and, when we came near the point at which our ways diverged, I quickened my pace and passed her.” – Araby. This quote is significant because it shows the lengths the narrator went to, to be in her presence. Another example would be caring so much that he gave his hopes up going to the Bazaar to give her a gift.

This sentence is too general and is not saying anything concrete about the story itself. If you are not familiar with the story you can not get what this sentence means. This sentence is not giving specific details, or communicating in any way what happened in the plot of the story in a way that someone can make a connection from. It needs to be more specific, so the reader that is not familiar with this story can get the writer’s point of view. Another factor that makes this sentence ineffective is the choice of words, words that are too broad. When I read this sentence I went like “what does this even mean.” I couldn’t understand what this person was talking about, even though I read the story.  If I had to rewrite this sentence, I would correct it as: In “Araby” by James Joyce, the tone that the narrator uses is aimed to express a character that is going through a melancholy’s life.