Read the following sentence from a student essay.
In the compelling short story “Araby” by James Joyce, the author encourages readers to examine the intricate character of the nameless narrator and the complexity of the human condition.
What is ineffective about this sentence?
In my opinion, this sentence is ineffective because it is too general and the writer only mentions what you can learn from the story but not what it’s about to get you to that point where you learn something from it.
How might you rewrite it in a way that offers specific details that would be informative to a reader?
If I could rewrite it I would do it in a way where I mention what happens to support why I feel that way. For example In the short story “Araby” by James Joyce, the author encourages readers to follow the journey of a young boy who gets infatuated with a girl and what can come from it.
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Paola, you’re on the right track here, but please don’t assume what the author is encouraging readers to do. The specifics about the boy’s infatuation are good, but when you say “what can come from it,” you again run into vague territory. What comes from it?