The sentence is ineffective because it is a generalized statement. The sentence does not offer any details to support its claim about the author trying to get her readers to understand the complexity of the human condition. It offers no details about what the condition is either. The sentence is also ineffective because it is trying to tell us the authors point of view which is not the readers job. Also the sentence did not explain what made the “condition” complexed? If I were to rewrite the question I would include details about what the condition is and how that effects the characters development and his development. I also will include details about the different themes and languages used in the story. I also will included information about why the boy was blinded by love and his struggles with reality. I also would include the characters names, since that is important details also.
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3 thoughts on “Yasmin Matthew-Johnson Discussion 4”
I definitely agree with you that this statement lacks vital information especially when it is supposed to be informative. I also like how you really went into adding specific examples/evidence of when the author James Joyce goes into the complexities of the nameless character in order to add not only substance to the original statement/claim but depth to the narrative which prospectively will engage the reader. I wish I could’ve read the revised statement, your ideas sound good.
Yes, I agree with you The original sentence lacks specifics and fails to substantiate the author’s goal of exploring the complexity of the human condition. A more effective revision should delve into the specific nature of the complex condition, providing details about its impact on character development, themes, and language in the story. Including character names and addressing the protagonist’s struggles with love and reality would offer crucial details, enriching the reader’s comprehension of the narrative’s depth and significance.
Yasmin, your critique of the sentence is very good. However, students were asked in the prompt to write a substitute sentence for this one.