This sentence is ineffective because its too general and the readers get no information about what they are reading. It tells the reader that it is a compelling story but what does that actually mean, you can say something is compelling but is it actually? The sentence is so general that I personally would have no interest of reading because it has nothing to hook the reader in, it is only just an opinion of the story and nothing more. The way I would rewrite this sentence is In the story araby a young man goes through life and has an epiphany that changes the way he feels about others. This sentence provides some context about the story without giving away too much or leaving too little. This sentence encourages the reader to find out about this young man and the epiphany that he had in the story.
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Petter, your comments are good; however, I think you need a bit more information in your sentence. What do you mean that “a young man goes through life?” Isn’t that extremely vague? And what is the nature of his epiphany, or at least, what leads the young man to it?