For one, praising Joyce’s ability to captivate readers isn’t needed. For another, the particular intricacies of the narrator’s character and where the complexity of “Araby” lies can be detailed without a leading sentence like the above one. I get the impression of trying to couch oneself in what this writer presumes to be widely-held opinions when they’re faced with their lack of a decently-stringed thesis.
Offering specific information easily cuts fat like that sentence. After all, a lack of confidence is remedied by finding something, anything, that’s enveloped within itself enough to fit in one sentence. Then one can do that again, a second time, a third, and ideally pierce a common thread through them all.
e.g. If I find and pull together many co-occurrences relating to “blindness” peppered through the text everywhere from actions to settings, I might allude to that in what seems to be the first sentence of an essay.
James Joyce’s short story “Araby” follows a nameless young boy who, blinded by the light of a “love” that he can’t place in reality, stumbles into the darker corners of his world.” If not super rooted in facts for an introductory sentence, I think that the concrete details therein can evoke the question “What does that mean?” in a way that trusts in the following paragraphs will hold (subjective) answers.
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Hello, Madelyn I just want to say that your calculation shows useful insights in preparing a more focused and convincing analysis. Starting with direct questioning of specific details within the text, like the concept of “blindness” in “Araby,” can lead to a more interesting and influential thesis statement. By reaching the introduction in real facts and thematic lines present in the story, you can invoke curiosity and invite readers to delve deeper into your analysis. This approach not only shows confidence in your understanding of the text but also sets a clear approach for this discussion.
Hey, Madelyn as I kept rereading the student’s sentence I came to the conclusion that not only was the sentence too vague and that is why I agree with your statement about how it isn’t necessary to praise the author about how amazing they are at writing when writing about their story.
Madelyn, your replacement sentence is an interesting and effective one that could be developed beautifully in an essay about “Araby.” It is focused, and there is so much opportunity for a discussion of the blindness and darkness in the story through scenes and recall of imagery. The sentence works on so many levels. It tells what the story is about, it hints at the imagery that pervades the story, and it also suggests the profound nature of the story.