The sentence is too general and doesn’t have any important details or claims that support what is explained, so it fails to fully demonstrate its point. This indicates the “complexity of the human situation” and the “complicated character” of the narrator, but it doesn’t say why these things matter or how they connect to the narrative. To better it, we should be more specific and offer readers examples from the text that emphasize the narrator’s complexity and the realistic aspect of human nature that is explored in the story. This will help readers understand why and how these aspects of the narrative influence the story’s overall meaning.
If I were to rewrite the sentence I would certainly write about specific aspects, the character development and the exposure of realistic human nature explored in “Araby” by James Joyce. I might also add how the narrator’s crush on Mangan’s sister shows his longing for connection and purpose, while his visit to the Araby bazaar shows his search for meaning despite feeling let down.
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Good afternoon Amen, I absolutely agree with you. I wrote something similar. The sentence is to vague and doesn’t give details or clarity. The characters names aren’t even mentioned. This information would help the reader to better understand what is going on in this story. This sentence doesn’t capture my attention at all!!! I wouldn’t be interested in reading this story with that sentence as an introduction. I think adding the narrator’s crush on Mangan’s sister does show his longing for a connection and purpose.
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Amen, the prompt asks students to write their own sentence to take the place of the one given.