This sentence is too general and is not saying anything concrete about the story itself. If you are not familiar with the story you can not get what this sentence means. This sentence is not giving specific details, or communicating in any way what happened in the plot of the story in a way that someone can make a connection from. It needs to be more specific, so the reader that is not familiar with this story can get the writer’s point of view. Another factor that makes this sentence ineffective is the choice of words, words that are too broad. When I read this sentence I went like “what does this even mean.” I couldn’t understand what this person was talking about, even though I read the story.
If I had to rewrite this sentence, I would correct it as: In “Araby” by James Joyce, the tone that the narrator uses is aimed to express a character that is going through a melancholy’s life.
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Thanks for starting things off. Gabriela. I would ask the same question: “What does this even mean?” You are so right that someone who had not read “Araby” would have no idea what sort of character is in the story or why he might be complex—or anything else! Your suggested sentence is concrete. You mention the tone of the story and how it is reflective of a melancholy narrator. This is an idea that can be developed with specific scenes, incidents, and imagery from the text.