My experience with essay one was that found the structure of the essay very well but once I started reading the essay I found myself struggling to connect the ideas of what the student was trying to portray because his ideas were kind of all over the place wasn’t very clear so for me it was a little challenging. My Approach to fix this in upcoming assignments is to take notes from the previous one and break down the text a little better and not try and rush through my writing process because sometimes I have many things to say but mix them all together so just making sure I get a better understanding of the whole passage and look deeper for quotes.
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Ronald, thanks for that interesting description of your main problem with this essay. I totally agree that the student essay was all over the place. I would not have hesitated to say that and maybe point to one place in the sample essay where the writer jumped from one big idea to another. Notice that the essay is full of “big” ideas and makes no reference to actual scenes or events in the story. If you read the comments by your colleague Jakob, you’ll see that he just took a leap and overtly criticized the student essay as the exercise in B.S. that it is.
Ronald I totally agree with you. Connecting the ideas was difficult for me as well. I am also going to try your approach in my future essays. One of my issues is rushing through my writing and not taking my time to jot down or structure my essay properly. For example, applying the quotes and citation is a huge issue. I can identify the quotes. However, applying the correct punctuation is the issue. Like you, I’m also hoping to do better in my future essays.
Good afternoon Ronald, I completely agree with you and your point on how it was challenging to connect the ideas because the student’s ideas were all over the place. This made me focus way more on structure and format in my essay and I barely acknowledged the two stories at that point. My body paragraphs were disorganized because I was going paragraph by paragraph from the student’s example essay which messed me up. Taking notes before starting the essay would probably also benefit me in future writing assignments, have a great day!
Hello Ronald, yes the input of the student’s response was written chaotically, and I believe plenty of other people in this class mentioned somewhere around your line. I appreciate this response because I have been into the same pickle as long as you have been and it comes with a knot you can’t untie. Occasionally when I do it, the voices inside me kept repeating the last few words I read in the sentence either through selective memory or as a habit. I do hope to bring up my understanding of the English course because just like any courses, it comes with surprises and unexpected turn of events that would lead you to confusion and sometimes regrets. I hope you the best Ronald, and learn the mistakes while you’re ahead