Summary
Racial and ethnic discrimination occurs daily and has been there for decades. Education is the key to helping to stop bullying; it will need to start from school, and obviously a little help from home. Learning about racism will help children, who will be our future, learn that they cannot relive the same mistakes that were made in our past. Every child has the right to grow up healthy, educated, and safe. Helping the children to understand that no one is less human than another, and we should treat everyone fairly, with respect and kindness.
There is been too many killings because of Racism and all this could've been avoided if the government with added history classes about slavery and teaching slavery will teach them the history of the roots of slavery in America, including who, when, how, and why. In 2013, Black Lives Matter was created as a social media hashtag after a Florida jury acquitted a white man, George Zimmerman, who was charged in the shooting of Black teenager Trayvon Martin. Black Lives Matter became an increasingly visible movement after the 2020 police killing of Floyd in Minneapolis. This movement sparked a global racial reckoning and renewed public interest in critical race theory, anti-racism, and restorative justice. Why the death of a couple of people needs to happen for the government to take action, why? The death of hundreds of hundreds of people it been for the cause of racism. I have seen kids saying I don’t want to be brown, instead of a parent teaching their child the color of the ski. The color between light and dark skin complexion has created a division in the black community in America, and though blacks have come a long way since slavery, they have yet to come to unification amongst one another when placed in the situation of skin differentiation. This is something that it needs to stop with the action of the government. Black, Indigenous, and other people of color have experienced racism in the past. Suffering oppression due to their identities and discrimination. Racism in America is present and it is an ongoing challenge. America has a complicated and contradictory the past.
Preparing students for life success requires a balanced education but the government need to know how to do the right job which were a set of lessons that could teach kids to develop social and emotional skills such as problem and feeling identification, goal setting, conflict resolution strategies, and interpersonal problem-solving skill. When a child goes to Pre-K their brain is like a sponge and If we teach them how to love others no matter their race, color, or social economic we could see a better future for them, taking some hate out of their life that is been passing from decades.
2 thoughts on “Peer Review”
1. Yes, the draft includes a clear thesis statement in the first paragraph that states the importance of educating children about racism to prevent discrimination and promote equality.
2. Yes, every body paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence that supports the thesis.
3. Yes, each body paragraph includes relevant supporting evidence that supports the topic sentence and thesis statement.
4. It is not clear from the draft whether it includes at least 3 sources or sources from specific databases.
5. Yes, the research supports the author’s thesis without replacing their voice. Quotes are explained and analyzed.
6. No, the author does not include an opposing viewpoint or refutation.
7. The audience is not explicitly stated, but it can be assumed that it is directed towards anyone interested in learning about the importance of educating children about racism.
8. Yes, the draft is well-organized with clear transitions between paragraphs.
9. The draft provides a clear argument about the importance of educating children about racism and how it can prevent discrimination in the future. It is well-organized and provides relevant evidence to support the thesis.
10. The author could consider adding an opposing viewpoint and refutation to provide a more balanced argument. Additionally, specifying the sources used in the draft and including more specific examples could make the argument more compelling.
Question 1: yes, this argument draft includes a thesis statement right in the first sentence it states education is the key to racial discrimination
Question 2: yes, yes, each body paragraph includes the topic sentence it goes in depth
Question 3: yes, each body paragraph contains relative supporting evidence and also uses social media and recent events
Question 4: no it’s not clear I didn’t come across any source in the draft
Question 5: yes, they summarize and analyzed
Question 6: no it does not
Question 7: the audience would be parents and the Department of education
Question 8: every well organized
Question 9: the strength of this draft is the thesis
Question 10: I would suggest the author include the opposing viewpoint