… by replying to my post. This way, you can see what your classmates, have posted. Also, I will comment on your outlines here, so please check back next week/ after the due date/ March 29th.
Here is what I suggest:
Topic:
Intro: (hook, intro to topic, thesis statement)
Premise 1:
Supporting Evidence:
Premise 2:
Supporting Evidence:
Premise 3/ Opposing Viewpoint:
Supporting Evidence:
Conclusion: (paraphrase your thesis, and explain why this topic matters)
Please note that your essay can have more than 3 body paragraphs, and feel free to include more than 3 premises–either way, this will be a base for your draft.
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Topic: gun violence
Intro: (hook, intro to topic, thesis statement)
Gun control is a significant issue, and many different views are taken towards it. In a world where people can access guns with little or no explicit checks, the topic of gun control has taken increased significance. The discussion around the capacity of higher gun control levels to reduce gun violence is much discussed. A key point supporting more gun control is that it can reduce gun-related violence. This means implementing tougher guidelines, such as increased background checks, mandated safety classes, and longer waiting periods for gun purchases, to make it more difficult for individuals to access weapons. Furthermore, “red flag” laws may be used to take away guns from potentially dangerous people. All these strategies could likely reduce gun violence. This essay will take an in-depth look at this question, mulling the proofs on both sides and reaching the conclusion that increased gun control measures to curb gun violence.
Premise 1: Research from across the United States confirms that greater gun control reduces firearm-related homicides.
Supporting Evidence: According to the article “gun violence” by Susan Ladika, “John Gunn, assistant professor of psychology at Gwynedd Mercy University in Pennsylvania, who worked with the New Jersey Gun Violence Research Center at Rutgers University, found that states with the most gun control laws have lower homicide and suicide rates than those with fewer laws.” (Ladika, footnote 35).
Premise 2: It is suggested that by implementing more solid gun control, mass shootings can be minimized.
Supporting Evidence: According to the article “gun violence” by Susan Ladika, “We have found that when large capacity mags are regulated, you get drastic drops in both the incidence of gun massacres and the fatality rate of gun massacres,” Columbia professor Klarevas said.” (Ladika, footnote 40).
Premise 3/ Opposing Viewpoint: Conversely, those who oppose increased gun control measures suggest that it is not a solution to criminal activity involving firearms. They argue that while gun laws may prevent law-abiding citizens from access, criminals will still find ways to procure firearms.
Supporting Evidence: According to the article “gun violence” by Susan Ladika, “The lack of serial numbers makes it extremely difficult for law enforcement officers to trace ghost guns back to their purchasers if they are found at crime scenes.” (Ladika, footnote 14).
Conclusion: (paraphrase your thesis, and explain why this topic matters)
Overall, this essay has explored the issue of increased gun control standards to reduce gun violence. All evidence gathered demonstrates that more regulations on access to firearms will decrease gun-related events. Research from states with stringent gun control laws demonstrates that when tough regulations are placed, homicides drop drastically. Also, the information collected proposes that with better policies, mass shootings can be reduced. While some suggest that criminals may still find ways to obtain firearms, regulations will make it more difficult and cut down on the number of gun deaths. Taking these facts into consideration, it is clear that the implementation of higher gun control standards can be beneficial to the public’s safety. This topic is especially relevant given the heightened levels of violence seen in society, making it critical that measures are taken to protect the people.
Greetings,
My name is Jahira and I would like to just say it is a wonderful thing to know that many are concerned about gun violence! I lost a close family friend on new year’s at the time the ball dropped entering 2019. This crushed me and I’ve never known how to deal with it. I am truly looking forward to your completed piece for this argument!
Very detailed outline, basically a draft, which is great.
I am not sure what the thesis is–can you clarify? Is it: increased gun control measures to curb gun violence? If so, increased gun control by whom? on whom? “measures” – better, more specific word?
Also, how can you refute premise 3?
My brother was killed 32 years ago for being at the wrong time, a wrong place many people die from gun-related incidents every year and I still don’t see some restrictions by the law. Thus, whether guns should be controlled has been a controversial topic for many years. People should be allowed to protect themselves by owning guns, however, there should be more restrictions for those that own a gun and for those that buy a gun. Good Topic Fu Qi.
Topic: Foster Care and Child Reform Crisis
Intro: Studies show that 6% of the entirety of children within the US alone will enter the foster care system before the age of 18.5 years old. Children are being harmed in these homes as well!
Premises #1: Reasons children enter the foster care system.
Supporting Evidence #1:https://www.afs4kids.org/blog/29-surprising-foster-care-facts/#:~:text=6%20percent%20of%20all%20children,more%20likely%20to%20have%20Anxiety.
https://library.cqpress.com/cqresearcher/document.php?id=cqresrre1991092700
Premises #2: Child abuse and neglect enforce their homes.
Supporting Evidence #2:https://www.verywellfamily.com/top-reasons-children-enter-foster-care-27123
Premises #3/Opposing Side: Accountability and child welfare reform agencies.
Supporting Evidence #3: https://www.google.com/amp/s/www.fftllc.com/blog/alarming-foster-care-statistics%3fhs_amp=true
https://library.cqpress.com/cqresearcher/document.php?id=cqresrre2005042200
Conclusion: Child welfare agencies have to do better in order to ensure that children who have already endured trauma and their homes are placed in a home that will not give them a second experience of that.
Good plan here. What is the thesis? That children are being harmed in these homes? If so, can you make this more specific? Harmed- define. what homes? what children?
Premises 1 and 3 do not sound like claims, but simply inform us about the topic–revise into claims?
Topic: Abortion
Intro: (hook, intro to topic, thesis statement)
Although abortion has been around since the early centuries, the same controversy has not changed whether it’s because of religion, culture, or norms The debate continues to be the same whether it should be illegal to have an abortion. The topic of abortion has been brought up in the supreme court where the debate is about the 14th amendment protecting abortion as a fundamental, right. This means it’s a woman’s choice and right to choose to proceed with the procedure. Abortion is legal in some states and also illegal in some states. It all depends on the state you live in and the stage of the pregnancy. those opposing state abortion should be illegal in all states no matter the stage of the pregnancy. like the 14th amendment that states equal protection, women deserve this right no matter the situation.
Premise 1: states that the main priority of the government should be that all people should have access to basic health care.
Supporting Evidence: the article “Would restricting federally funded family planning clinics from discussing abortion violate the First Amendment?” Stephen Koff states “When a patient seeks information about pregnancy, she deserves timely and accurate information about all options, including abortion. My patients’ needs, not a government mandate, should dictate the counseling they receive .”
Premise 2: not only they are taking women’s right to their bodies but from seeking any help that is provided to them.
Supporting Evidence: The article “Abortion politics” by Stencel, S. States “the Department of Health, Education and Welfare from ending Medicaid payments for abortions until the law’s constitutionality is decided.”
Premise 3/ Opposing Viewpoint: points out the views on South Dakota’s anti-life and pro-life
Supporting Evidence: In the article “Bans and Exceptions “ by Kenneth Jost, Kathy Koch discuss “A life is a life no matter how it gets there,” Megan Barnett, who became pregnant following a rape and declined emergency contraception or an abortion, told the South Dakota Right to Life’s annual”
Conclusion: (paraphrase your thesis, and explain why this topic matters)
Abortion will continue to be a big controversy. And as we discussed in this essay and it’s a woman’s right and equal right that shouldn’t be questioned Or judged. No medical health should be taken away simply because our opinions aren’t the same.
Good plan for the essay. Thesis? Is it that abortion should be legal? Like you say, it is legal in many states, so what argument can you make here? Who are you trying to convince? Select your audience here.
Topic: Should transgender rights be legally protected?
Intro:
Transgender people have been left out and treated badly for a long time, and the law in many countries doesn’t offer them much security.
Intro to topic: Transgender rights are a highly debated topic. Some people want transgender people to have the same rights as other people, while others disagree for different reasons.
Thesis statement: Transgender people should be protected by the law because they are prone to discrimination and bias. They should also have the same rights as everyone else.
Premise 1: Transgender people can be hurt by bias and prejudice.
Supporting Evidence:
Transgender individuals are at a higher risk of facing discrimination in employment, healthcare, housing, and public accommodations.
Transgender individuals experience higher rates of poverty, homelessness, and violence compared to non-transgender individuals.
Premise 2: Transgender people deserve equal rights as any other citizen.
Supporting Evidence:
Transgender people are entitled to the same constitutional rights as anyone else, including freedom of speech, religion, assembly, and due process.
Transgender individuals have the right to access public facilities, such as restrooms, based on their gender identity.
Premise 3/ Opposing Viewpoint: Some people oppose transgender rights on various grounds, including religious, moral, or biological grounds.
Supporting Evidence:
Some people argue that transgender people are violating natural or biblical laws, and that gender identity is fixed at birth and cannot be changed.
Some people believe that transgender people are a threat to public safety, particularly in restrooms and other gender-segregated spaces.
Conclusion:
Paraphrase thesis: In conclusion, transgender people deserve legal protection as they face discrimination and bias, and they deserve equal rights under the law.
Explain why this topic matters: Protecting transgender rights is a matter of human rights and social justice, and it is important for creating a more equitable and inclusive society. It is also important for ensuring the well-being and safety of transgender individuals, who have historically faced significant barriers to full participation in society.
Good, thorough outline. Your thesis implies that transgender people are not protected by the law–is this accurate? What law? In what countries? You mention a global setting, but I’d suggest selecting one country to focus on–as how can you prove an argument that applies to the entire world in under 5 pages? So maybe, which country and which laws are you focusing on?
Intro: Teaching about Racism
Premise 1: Teaching the value of diversity it may help with Racism around the world. If we start teaching from elementary it could help students to build empathy, an essential skill for social and emotional development
Supporting Evidence: Critical race theory be part of the classroom, Teaching about slavery in elementary school, can build on children’s instincts and help students apply them to their classrooms, at home, in communities, and study of the United States.
Premise 2: Students deserve to learn the full and true history of the United States at a young.
Supporting Evidence: CRT is not only bad for those it wrongly accuses of racism or the guilt it gives white students, but it also has adverse effects on racial minorities.
Premise 3/ Opposing Viewpoint: Teaching racism without warning can cause children to run into challenges that they’re unprepared for, but focusing only on bias and discrimination can drive anxiety or depression.
Supporting Evidence: Unfortunately, neither state departments of education nor the publishing industry provide effective guidance for teaching about slavery to young people.
Conclusion:
CRT is not only bad for those it wrongly accuses of racism or the guilt it gives white students, but it also has adverse effects on racial minorities. Slavery is a fundamental part of United States history. As students learn about the history of slavery using this framework, they engage in conversations about the meaning and value of freedom. They analyze how power organizes our past and present. When young students are prepared to understand the larger arc of American history, they learn about identity, diversity, culture, time, change, citizenship, conflict, imperialism, and capitalism.
Good start though a bit confusing–what is the thesis? and unclear if you are for or against teaching children about critical race theory–revise?
Topic: The effects of stress on mental and physical health
Intro: (hook, intro to topic, thesis statement)
The average American life has three staple things: Sleep, Work, Eat and then repeat. If all three factors go smoothly, the average American will live a happy, fulfilled life. An often overlooked piece of one’s life that can affect all three of these factors is stress. Stress can have a significant effect on a person’s mental and physical health, ranging from diseases to disorders. Stress has been proven to cause suicidal thoughts, sleep deprivation, and loneliness in youth and adults. We ought to take a careful look at our lives and what causes this bad stress to occur. Once we pinpoint the cause of the stress, we can work to combat it and improve our well-being one step at a time.
Premise 1: Job Stress is linked directly to sleep deprivation which can cause depression, obesity, and memory loss.
Supporting Evidence: According to Marcia Clemmit, notable populations that are sleep-deprived include students, late-shift workers, medical residents, and truck drivers. All of these are occupations that pressure the person to put all of their energy and time towards their job, which causes direct stress in doing their job correctly, following deadlines, and keeping up with the demands of the workforce. In turn, sleep deprivation occurs on a nightly basis and can be life-long if left untreated. Researchers have found negative impacts of only getting a few hours of sleep which are as follows, “Sleep deprivation greatly increases the risk of obesity and illnesses such as cardiovascular disease and diabetes; makes it harder to learn physical skills, remember facts and control one’s emotions, and may even raise one’s risk of developing a mental illness like depression or post-traumatic stress disorder (PTSD).”
Premise 2: Loneliness and Isolation can lead to high-stress levels.
Supporting Evidence: At the height of the pandemic and with society turning more and more introverted, a woman found herself indulging in stress-inducing activities to feel less lonely. The woman’s name is Paula Dutton and after moving cross-country, losing both her parents and several close friends, she said, “I worked myself into a fever pitch in my loneliness,” After that, she experienced a panic attack and had to be hospitalized. Afterward, she joined a church group to help combat what she went through. Many psychologists are pointing to the stressors of society, society leading people to be single, live alone, move far from family, and essentially promote social isolation. With no release from the pressure of working, keeping up with chores, or keeping up with relationships, many find themselves dealing with a great amount of stress.
Premise 3/ Opposing Viewpoint: Some claim stress is a good thing, but not all stress is good stress.
Supporting Evidence: Researchers at UC Berkeley claim that stress can promote optimal alertness, and behavioral and cognitive performance. Specifically, acute stress, which is small amounts of stress over periods that have been shown to push you in the right direction with your deadlines and personal goals. While this may be factual, this claim of acute stress is not probable for many Americans who work long shifts, may work multiple jobs, and have multiple goals they want to achieve at once. Stress can come from many different factors and acute stress may only be probable to those working and studying part-time, youth who may have free time on their hands, or those who are unemployed.
Conclusion: (paraphrase your thesis, and explain why this topic matters):
In conclusion, stress can have a significant effect on a person’s mental and physical health. It can lead to depression, different cardiovascular diseases, sleep deprivation, loneliness, and more. This is a crisis at hand that every American has to deal with at one point or another because we are a country of hard workers and with hard work comes stress. This stress can be managed, though, with the right amount of support, management, and leisure. We don’t have to work ourselves to a pulp to succeed, it’s important to take time out of your week for self-care, family, and friends because happiness and liberty just might be able to combat stress after all.
The premises are here and clearly stated. I am not sure what the thesis is–there are several statements in your intro that could work if revised to be more specific. If something is proved, then it’s a statement so cannot be an argument–keep this in mind. If you want to argue that “we need to take a closer look” at something, then use more specific language, as “taking a look” is too vague. What steps should we be taking here?
Topic: Should technology addiction be considered a mental health disorder?
Intro: (hook, intro to topic, thesis statement) Modern technology is a great innovation and it has made our lives so much easier. There are social medias, video games, internet and so much more that serves entertainment, knowledge, and communication. However, they are made in such an addictive manner that it has led to mental issues or an addiction. There are discussions specifically in the US about whether an internet addiction should be considered a mental health disorder. Long screen time should be considered an addiction and a mental health disorder because it affects our physiological wellbeing, and it leads to other mental issues.
Premise 1: Excessive use of technology can affect our physiological wellbeing.
Supporting Evidence: Long screen time can interrupt our daily routine. People who are addicted forget to eat and sleep on time which can can drain you and affect your physical health. They tend to stay at home, avoid any kind of social interactions which leads to social isolation and loneliness. Chronic loneliness has severe consequences on our mental health. Technology addiction affects us like any other addiction does.
Premise 2: Technology addiction can lead to other mental health disorders.
Supporting Evidence: Tech addicted people are prone to have depression, anxiety, stress or vice versa. Addiction of technology have led people to commit suicide because it has affected them physically, mentally, and socially. They can’t focus on their school or job, can’t manage any kind of relationships which leads them to get depression, anxiety and they need counseling and therapy which is why it should be considered a separate mental health disorder.
Premise 3/ Opposing Viewpoint: There’s no clear evidence of whether an addiction of technology spikes mental issues.
Supporting Evidence: Technology addiction doesn’t fall under the clinical definition of addiction. Technology has made people to become or feel less lonely and isolated. People turn to social media and games when they were already diagnosed with depression and stress.
Conclusion: (paraphrase your thesis, and explain why this topic matters) Technology can be an addiction and it should be considered a mental health disorder because there are people that are suffering mentally. It can lead to chronic loneliness, depression, poor hygiene, time consuming, destruction of oneself. This topic has been an ongoing discussion for decades and there are countries that have considered taking actions to prevent further damage but yet it’s not considered a mental health disorder and DSM-5 are considering the gaming addiction as one which to me isn’t any different because it falls under technology. Further advancements of technology can be more addictive and detrimental which is why it needs further attention so there are treatments and people take its consequences seriously.