Musa Sisoko
Literacy In American Society
Ewa Barnes
4/5/2022
The purpose of this essay is to understand and analyze how Native Americans have been affected by the institutionalization of literacy in the United States. I conducted my research by going to the BMCC database and researching an article in CQ researcher. How were Native Americans affected by the institutionalization of literacy in the United States? The Native Americans struggled a lot when it came to education in the United States. Native Americans didn’t have a fair shot in the school systems and they were racial discriminated against and were also belittled. Native Americans deserve to have equal rights and not be mistreated by others.
Native Americans have fought for equality for the past 19 centuries. White European settlers took the Native Americans land and forced them to move from their lands that they owned and move to the western territories that belonged to the Europeans. They were also forced to attend boarding schools and abandon their own languages to learn English and adapt to the European costumes by the U.S government in 1891. According to “Native American Rights” by Christiana L. Lyons, it states: “U.S. government begins to force Native American children to attend boarding schools to learn English language and European customs”. This was crucial for the Native Americans because they were not only forced to attend boarding schools, but also abandon their own language out of their own will to learn English. They also had been forced to adapt to costumes outside of their own culture and learn about the Europeans customs and their way of living.
Native Americans having to give up their language had a very bad effect on them. This policy was in the 1870’s and continued on a very large scale through the 1970s (Klug). Native children were treated very poorly and suffered a lot in these institutions for using their own language. They would get punished severely, physically and psychologically for speaking to each other in their own language rather than speaking English. In an article “Native American Language Act: Twenty Years Later, Has It Made a Difference” by Kelsey Klug, it says: “This policy began in the 1870s and continued on a large scale through the 1970s; a few schools are still operating today. In these institutions, children were severely punished, both physically and psychologically, for using their own languages instead of English. These experiences convinced entire generations of Native people that their children would be better off learning to speak only English. Hoping to spare their children the pain they once went through, parents stopped passing their languages on to their children, and thereby stopped creating fluent speakers of those languages”. Native Americans who had suffered from these institutions were convinced that their children would be better off learning English instead of passing down their languages due to not wanting their children to go through the same pain and torture as they experienced. Because their language wasn’t passed down to the next generation of Native people, there were not many of them who could speak their languages fluently.
3 thoughts on “Research Essay Draft”
1. Does the author clearly state the purpose of the essay? Explain.
Yes, “to understand and analyze how Native Americans have been affected by the institutionalization of literacy in the United States.” I think in the introduction though, the purpose briefly becomes to say that Native Americans deserve equal rights and treatment.
2. Does the author describe their research methods? Explain.
There is the research method of the specific question asked and getting information from the article, although I believe you used multiple pieces of evidence, so maybe either make it more general by not mentioning the specific article or mention all of the articles in the introduction.
3. Does the author state the central idea of the essay? Explain.
I think so. The central idea is to discuss the challenges that Native Americans have faced in education systems and literacy in America.
4. Does the author support the central idea with relevant evidence? Explain.
Yes, there are multiple background sources and they are relevant to the purpose and central idea.
5. Does the author interpret relevant evidence? Explain.
The evidence is interpreted. There is a lot of information and there could be more of an analysis about what it means in terms of equality in education and maybe even more about how things in history have influenced Native Americans presently in terms of literacy.
6. Does the author reference at least one course material? Explain.
I’m not sure that course material was referenced. There were sources but I don’t recognize them. If not, you can use the videos from class to show how these things are impacting younger people today.
7. Is the essay well-organized? Explain.
I think it is fairly well-organized, but a conclusion would do a lot to bring it all together.
8. Are the grammar, syntax and vocabulary consistent and appropriate with a college-level essay? Explain.
Overall yes. There were a few errors like “racially discriminated” and adding the apostrophe for possessive “Native Americans’ land” that could be easily fixed.
9. What are the strengths of this draft? Explain.
There is good, solid evidence that is well explained. There is also a clear purpose.
10. Do you have any other comments or suggestions?
Maybe separate the essay a bit more into paragraphs to keep relevant information together and make it easier to read. Also add a conclusion so everything can be connected and understood in terms of coming back to your purpose.
Does the author clearly state the purpose of the essay? Explain.
Yes, to show how Native Americans have been affected by the institutionalization of the United States.
Does the author describe their research methods? Explain.
I believe so, there are definitely research method used here but they aren’t introduced in the introduction, if you introduced them it would be a lot clearer.
Does the author state the central idea of the essay? Explain.
Yes, to show how the Native Americans have been dealing with the American school system.
Does the author support the central idea with relevant evidence? Explain.
Yes there are sources in the text that support the central idea.
Does the author interpret relevant evidence? Explain.
The evidence he used did talk about Native Americans was relevant as it went to his central idea.
Does the author reference at least one course material? Explain.
I dont believe that there was a course material that was listed.
Is the essay well-organized? Explain.
With as much given to us so far, it is organized but there still is work to do.
Are the grammar, syntax and vocabulary consistent and appropriate with a college-level essay? Explain.
Yes, this is a college level essay, the vocabulary is appropriate for a college level class.
What are the strengths of this draft? Explain.
There is a clear purpose in this essay, he knows where he’s going with it.
Do you have any other comments or suggestions?
Give us some more evidence and elaborate on the specific details you give us a little more.
1. Does the author clearly state the purpose of the essay? Explain.
Yes, he specifically states that the purpose is to discuss the and understand the affect of American literacy on Native Americans.
2. Does the author describe their research methods? Explain.
Yes. The author states that he went to the BMCC database.
3. Does the author state the central idea of the essay? Explain.
Yes he states the central idea that Native Americans have struggled because of discrimination partly due to the literacy barrier.
4. Does the author support the central idea with relevant evidence? Explain.
He explains how Native Americans have a disadvantage throughout history.
5. Does the author interpret relevant evidence? Explain.
Yes the evidence used is relevant to his main purpose.
6. Does the author reference at least one course material? Explain.
The author uses sources but I don’t recognize any from a course material.
7. Is the essay well-organized? Explain.
Besides a conclusion, yes this is an organized essay.
8. Are the grammar, syntax and vocabulary consistent and appropriate with a college-level essay? Explain.
I think the grammar in this essay is up to par with a college-level essay.
9. What are the strengths of this draft? Explain.
this draft explains your purpose thoroughly and gets your point across.
10.Do you have any other comments or suggestions?
A more concrete conclusion would tie this essay together well.