For this research essay, I selected the Literacy History Project. Specifically, the study of how African Americans have been historically affected by the practice of formal literacy in the United States, as well as how our states system continues to fail when developing our people.
The ability to read, write, and comprehend has been historically gatekept from people without power here in our country. In the United States, literacy is power. In other words, it is a hegemonic tool used by the dominant class in the United States. The paper will research the way this hegemonic tool has been used to oppress and see how communities have taken and used these tools to elevate themselves to power.
Literacy has been used in the United States for gaining or suppressing power. This is evident in the slave trade that once plagued the country. Slavers sought to keep slaves uneducated and things slaves could read like the bible were often edited to avoid slaves from revolting.
for a long time during the history of the United States whether that be people refusing to educate or the segregation of schools. But Literacy has also been used as a way for Black people to gain their power within this country through self-education or activists fighting for their freedoms. The point of this essay is to point out how the formal indoctrination of literacy affects these communities. From the 1960s, many Americans of different colors were educated in segregated schools. This education and schools that were offered to different peoples and communities other than white were often poorly funded which meant unequal access to facilities and resources that were given to their white counterparts. This barrier of education created and fostered by the institutions within United States and its government meant that African Americans could not obtain the education needed.
A major area that has affected African Americans historically has been the barrier of health literacy within the United States. According to Baraka Muvuka in her article ““Health Literacy in African-American Communities: Barriers and Strategies.” she states “more than Eighty-seven million American adults have low health literacy (LHL)” this affects Black communities at a disproportionate level because of the lower resources these communities have a on a wide range. The issue of having these high rates of low literacy has made Americans distrusting of the U.S health system. The article goes on to point out how most health information is written at a “upper high school level or college level.”
Sources
https://daily.jstor.org/black-english-matters/
Muvuka, Baraka et al. “Health Literacy in African-American Communities: Barriers and Strategies.” Health literacy research and practice vol. 4,3 (2020): e138-e143. doi:10.3928/24748307-20200617-01
3 thoughts on “Rough Draft”
1. Does the author clearly state the purpose of this essay? Explain. Yes Joshua stated that the purpose of this essay is to explain how African Americans have been affected by the practice of formal literacy in the U.S.and how it’s failed them.
2. Does the author describe their research methods? Explain. He hasn’t really explain the research method used but maybe in his final draft it will be there.
3. Does the author state the central idea of the essay? Explain. Yes he does, the central idea is how the this hegemonic tool of literacy has been used to oppress African American communities.
4. Does the author support the central idea with relevant evidence? Explain. I believe so, he states that the U.S. has used literacy to gain power and that African american slaves weren’t taught to read so they won’t revolt.
5. Does the author interpret relevant information? Explain. Yes, he states that the U.S. has kept African Americans in segregated schools.
6. Does the author reference at least one course material? Explain. No, but I’m sure he will in the final essay.
7. Is the essay well-organized? Explain. The essay has a really good base however, some of the topics can be explained on how they relate to each other.
8. Are the grammar, syntax, and vocabulary consistent and appropriate with a college-level essay? Explain. Yes.
9. What are the strengths of this draft? Explain. The strength of this essay is how important knowing the U.S.’s history and what was done to African Americans.
10. Do you have any other comments or suggestions? I think he has a great foundation but it can be flow a bit better if received.
Hi Joshua,
1.Does the author clearly state the purpose of the essay? Yes, the purpose of the essay was stated very clearly
2. Does the author describe their research methods?
You didn’t describe the methods you used to research your essay, It’d be nice if you included this info in your final draft
3. Does the author state the central idea of the essay?
The central idea was explained very well
4. Does the author support the central idea with relevant evidence?
Yes, the source you used was relevant to the essay topic
5. Does the author interpret relevant evidence?
You interpreted the relevant evidence really well, however, in my opinion the interpretation is a little too short
6. Does the author reference at least one course material?
I don’t know if the source you used was discussed in our class but if not, you’ll have to add it to the final draft
7. Is the essay well-organized?
I think organization is the weakest part of your essay, it seemed like the introduction was stretched onto several paragraphs, but if you combine them and add more body paragraphs the essay will be very good!
8. Are the grammar, syntax and vocabulary consistent and appropriate with a college-level essay?
The capitalization is lacking at times, but overall it’s good.
9. What are the strengths of this draft?
I really like the use of your vocabulary in this essay
10. Do you have any other comments or suggestions?
I would definitely make the essay a lot longer, but since it’s a only a rough draft I understand that’s it’s not complete yet
1. Does the author clearly state the purpose of the essay? The author clearly said the purpose of the piece.
2. Does the author describe their research methods?
I could not see the methods you used to research your essay. This is a rough draft, so that it may be in the final draft.
3. Does the author state the central idea of the essay?
The author stated the central idea was stated in the essay.
4. Does the author support the central idea with relevant evidence?
The supportive evidence did support the central idea.
5. Does the author interpret relevant evidence?
I believe that the author interpreted the relevant evidence well; it could go into more depth.
6. Does the author reference at least one-course material?
I believe the author references one-course material, but I am not entirely sure. It may be in the final draft.
7. Is the essay well-organized?
I believe that the organization could be a bit better. One thing that would help out a lot would be having the introduction of your essay combined with the other paragraphs you had. This is so the reader does not get tired of reading similar ideas constantly. Instead, introduce new things in the body paragraphs.
8. Are the grammar, syntax, and vocabulary consistent and appropriate for a college-level essay? The grammar is not bad, but I would use Grammarly (a great thing that can help with all parts of the piece.)
9. What are the strengths of this draft?
The use of your vocabulary was strong, and the central idea.
10. Do you have any other comments or suggestions?
Since this is the rough draft, I know the final one will be much longer and smoother.